I rarely have this complaint, quite the opposite, in fact

[conuly]

So you know it's serious when I say it: You, anonymous author, would do well to purchase a thesaurus and learn how to use it.

In particular, if you are not a bigot - and I must admit that you don't seem to be - you would be well-served to banish the word "homosexual" from your vocabulary entirely. Try "gay". At any rate, even if you're talking about LGBT issues, neither word should appear more than six times in a five sentence paragraph. That's not the only example of limited vocabulary here, but it's by far the most egregious.

(Of course, this is all a symptom of a bigger problem, which is a noted tendency to repeat ideas and infodrop. The books are cheap, at least, probably because nobody sprung for an editor or even provided coffee for a beta reader.)

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[conuly]

The word choices are a symptom of a much bigger problem, I'm afraid.

[silveradept]

I had a suspicion that might be the case. Are we sure it's a human and not a neural net attempting to write a story?

[conuly]

Mmm. His prose is awful, and his characterization needs a little work. (I'm forgiving the lack of worldbuilding because I suspect we're not supposed to take it overly seriously.) However, credit where it's due and the reason I've read these books, his ability to hold together an interesting plot is much better than a baby neural net could do.

[silveradept]

Ah. So it's someone who needs encouragement to improve on the things that need improving and to keep the things that are going well, going well.