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conulySo you know it's serious when I say it: You, anonymous author, would do well to purchase a thesaurus and learn how to use it.
In particular, if you are not a bigot - and I must admit that you don't seem to be - you would be well-served to banish the word "homosexual" from your vocabulary entirely. Try "gay". At any rate, even if you're talking about LGBT issues, neither word should appear more than six times in a five sentence paragraph. That's not the only example of limited vocabulary here, but it's by far the most egregious.
(Of course, this is all a symptom of a bigger problem, which is a noted tendency to repeat ideas and infodrop. The books are cheap, at least, probably because nobody sprung for an editor or even provided coffee for a beta reader.)
In particular, if you are not a bigot - and I must admit that you don't seem to be - you would be well-served to banish the word "homosexual" from your vocabulary entirely. Try "gay". At any rate, even if you're talking about LGBT issues, neither word should appear more than six times in a five sentence paragraph. That's not the only example of limited vocabulary here, but it's by far the most egregious.
(Of course, this is all a symptom of a bigger problem, which is a noted tendency to repeat ideas and infodrop. The books are cheap, at least, probably because nobody sprung for an editor or even provided coffee for a beta reader.)
