An attempt at a rhymed poem

[conuly]

First, we must take out the bread
And then, the peanut butter spread
No, you cannot have it now.
No! What have I just said?

I will make this sandwich now
And drink it with milk, from a cow
We can't be all out of it!
How can this be? Tell me how!

Now you can have a little bit
Just go into your chair and sit
I'm so sad, I hang my head....
The lack of milk cast down my spir-it.

Okay, this is a poetic form I'm never using again.

Comments

[mortaine.livejournal.com]

Poetry forms kick ass! And your poem totally rocks!

And forget what that other person said about a villanelle-- they're awesome when you want to focus on one very specific idea, and emphasize it through repetition.

[conuly]

I agree - but they look really difficult. I don't think I can manage one in the time I have to do them in.